“Don’t wait too long Donny, your dad is a fickle man; he could change his mind at any moment.
“I know Mom, believe me, I know.”
It took a few days for Donny to pack for the cold cold weather he would have to endure, to find someone to care for his very needy dogs (five Dobermans), and mostly to muster up the courage to visit the old man in his old house, with his old-school set-in-his ways conservative viewpoints.
He had come out to the world years ago, but facing his father with the truth of who he was had proven more difficult for Donny; impossible really as he could think of no one more conservative or more judgmental than his father.
But last week the unexpected call had come, translated into a herky jerky message on his phone that had said something about how time had taught his dad a few hard lessons, had opened up a few locked doors; the cryptic words only becoming clear when Donny finally walked into his Dad’s frozen cabin to see him cuddled up on the couch with someone who could only be described, by the looks of things, as a boyfriend.
I like this! Nice twist. Yes, it’s always those closeted conservatives that surprise us. Good job, my friend.
Beautifully done, and incredibly in only 5 sentences. So little, yet it says so much. Congratulations
Linda! Welcome to The Jaded Lens. I appreciate you stopping by. I have had so much fun with Lillie’s “Five Sentence Fiction” and I wholeheartedly encourage you to give it a whirl!
Britton- I love this piece. did not expect that ending but it made my heart feel good. well done.
Reading along I wondered if you’d spoken to my sons about their dad and then I came to the end and couldn’t help laughing. Never in a million words for him but for this man and this son a wonderful turnaround. Love it!
Wow! I didn’t see that coming. I love it. Do you ever submit these to the short short contests? Also, I could sit and read a whole collection of these. Wonderful.
Thank you Elisabeth. I’ve never submitted any of my writing to a contest…perhaps I should be more bold! I appreciate the encouragement.
The title — with all the metaphor it holds — had me thinking I was in for a surprise. Indeed a got one.
Denial, that most surprising of conditions.
I love denial!!
–Interesting & Surprising! xx
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