The sun pushed its radiance upon her through the purposely darkened blinds; always that rogue, penetrating shaft slipping through a lazy crack. So she rose, reluctantly and despite a weight that felt as heavy as three elephants, not because she wanted to but because she had promised him she would.
The automatic coffee maker had been a brilliant idea, a gift from her closest friend, the kind of friend who forces things upon you that you need but don’t really want; the kind of friend who refuses to leave you alone even when all you want to do is pull the covers up over your head and never emerge again – ever.
As she sipped the strong dark brew, she glanced out the window and noticed that someone had been tending the flowers her husband had planted for her last birthday. She was grateful for the help and knew that she should find the flowers beautiful and yet every single thing around her looked as black as soot, as black and desolate as her heart had felt since her reason for living had suddenly stopped breathing.
This piece is in response to Lillie McFerrin’s brain-child, “Five Sentence Fiction,” which can be found here:
The word: “desolate”
5 thoughts on “Black as soot”
Bleak stuff Britt, but well executed. It’s good to see you back x
This is wonderful, Britton. My favorite piece of yours ever. All the elements work together in perfect balance. Really lovely work, my friend.
As long as you can lay your mitts on hot coffee left by a friend, the world is neither bleak nor empty, but the lack of a picture is.
Britton- haunting piece and beautifully written. Well done. Again.
I can’t imagine a weight much heavier than three elephants . . . and yet the flowers manage to poke through the darkness. The coffee maker really is a brilliant device — for all the imagery it evokes. Great to see you writing again.